Hey everyone!
I wanted to share with you a piece of art that was made for one of my stories:
Seafarer. Seafarer is one of the stories that will be published in Worlds of Magic
when it is released on the 7th of December. The story of Seafarer
follows a young woman as she tries to find out how her mother fell in
love with her partner. It's a tale of how the pirate queen acquired
herself a princess. The two main characters are shown on the image!
In a way this post is a character introduction as well. I give you: Aaea and Isolde! (Click to enlarge!)
(by Ngo Hung)
Isn't it pretty?
This
story is one of friendship and love and light. It is about mysterious
magics and screaming kings and pirates who steal underwear. It's a fun
story of adventure as well as deep and insightful into the nature of
human relationships.
Excited? It's coming out on the 7th of December! Stay tuned.
WriteBot.
Friday, November 30, 2018
Thursday, November 29, 2018
Why you need to raise the stakes
Hey everyone!
How are you doing this fine day? My own writing is... suddenly not going well even though it's been perfect the last few days (???) and I'm going a bit crazy. Ah well. It might sort itself out.
Today let's talk about the importance of raising the stakes.
The most recent example of a series (TV) that failed at this is The Man in the High Castle. I've been dying to talk about this for at least a week since I started to watch Season 3. There will be some (minor) spoilers so if you don't want to know the end of Season 2 stop right here!
What is there to say about The Man in the High Castle.
It started great. The first two seasons were coherent, connected, and everything made sense within the universe where it's set. I liked some of the characters (Tagomi) and hated others (Frank). All of them had their part to play and the first two seasons had UNITY. It had a plot.
Cue Season 3.
The unity evaporated like water in the desert. The characters are no longer doing ANYTHING related to any plot or within their character (established in the first two seasons). They've all gone insane, there is no plot, and the only thing the season has established so far is to put in a lot more fluff. This fluff comes mostly through kissing and unnecessary sex scenes as well as dramatic (emo) scenes where people talk about their emotions that are way too prolonged. Of course I have nothing against either romantic or 'deep' scenes but those are neither. The 'romantic' scenes often happen to characters I don't care about (who were introduced badly in season two and three and with whom the audience has no emotional bond whatsoever) and the emotional talk scenes... well. There's about ten every episode and it's getting old.
There is also (as I have mentioned before) no plot in Season 3 whatsoever. Unless you count the three or four scenes where a dark tunnel is mentioned that needs to be investigated.
All right. Let's get to WHY it doesn't work though. I've talked a lot about WHAT doesn't work. It's time to look at the details of WHY.
The WHY in this case is actually very simple:
The STAKES are not high enough after Season 2. In fact there are almost no stakes at all.
Consider the characters.
At the end of season two they have already lost everything they could lose (Smith his son, Chief Inspector Kido his second in command, Frank is supposedly dead, Juliana everyone she loved, Ed and Childan their shop, livelihood, and family, Joe his honor and pride and so on and so forth, and Tagomi gave up his family for the greater good). These are characters who have absolutely nothing left (and Juliana's sister reappearing in the second season? Well in the third that plot point is made completely useless as the only journey they go through is 'how can we get sister back to her world').
All right. The characters then have nothing left = no personal stakes.
Let's examine the public stakes of s1 and s2 briefly. In s1 the public stakes were beautifully set up and in s2 climaxed upon.
Here is season one's storyline for each main character: What's up with (Juliana and) the films? What will the death of Frank's sister and her children make him do? How far will he go? Will Joe betray them all? Will Tagomi be able to help his spy get the blueprints for the Heisenberg to the science minister and get him out alive? Will Chief Inspector Kido successfully apprehend the resistance member who has the film?
These (mostly personal) stakes are all set up and solved. At the same time Season 2 is set up neatly.
Throughout Season 2 there are even more questions that need answers. There is a new film Juliana needs to see. It is terribly important. Will she manage to get the film to the Man in the High Castle? Who is the Man in the High Castle? Will Frank be found out? Will he be accused of shooting the Japanese crown prince? Will he survive the Yakuza? Will Joe reconnect with his father? Will Tagomi reconnect with his family in the alternate world? Will Chief Inspector Kido apprehend the resistance before it's too late? Will Smith's son survive the season? Will we (the audience) find out more about the films and alternate worlds? Will all of them be able to somehow avert the coming war?
The public stakes here are HUGE. If the Nazi Reich and the Japanese fight over America then millions of people will die. Hundreds of cities will be destroyed. Thousands of communities. And the stakes are averted only at the last minute.
Then we get to Season 3. All the questions above have been answered masterfully. It wasn't perfect (some loose ends and red-shirt setups) but there was a silver lining through all of the two seasons.
Let's see if we can find ANY stakes in this season.
Season 3 starts with Juliana's sister back in her life BUT she has to go back to her own world for reasons unknown - which means the whole plot point of her appearing AT ALL has just been made redundant. It would have been a good ending for Juliana who believes in people and always helps them to get something BACK. But no. Season 3 destroys this.
Frank meanwhile has been hiding out with some jews in the mountains of somewhere. (Denver?). The first and second seasons he has always been adamant about not being a jew (and not just because the Nazis would kill him but because he simply did not wish to live the jewish life). Suddenly, all he wants in life is to be a jew. (And anyway how did he survive the explosion when the girl standing right next to him got smashed up?)
Smith does not react to what happened to his son. He's chill as usual. There is no emotion there where it should have been. Then again... I guess it IS six months later. Smith also has problems with people trying to do him in (or at least get him into prison for treason). A new character is introduced as the 'antagonist' but killed off relatively quickly because ???
Chief Inspector Kido is (as always) doing his own thingamagic. However, all that translates to is his growing relationship with some white woman in a club. I will admit, that's at the moment the only part of the series I enjoy. I like how Kido went from 'I don't talk to working girls' to her being the only woman (person) he talks to honestly. Also she's taller than him which is cute.
Tagomi... is a mystery. He has averted the war in his world. He achieved his mission and why he left his family back in World 2 and returned to Nazi World. So why didn't he go back to them? He was happy there and they were starting to accept him again. BUT he has a new girlfriend (some Japanese painter who says she has a husband but still flirts with Tagomi every chance she gets???). It's all fine. He only loved his wife enough to learn how to traverse worlds.
All these characters do throughout 2/3 of the third season is... nothing whatsoever. Oh of course they're running around doing stuff but none of it has any stakes. Random romantic (or not so romantic since I don't care about these random insert characters who only popped up to have sex with one of the main/side characters) scenes happen. Juliana goes crazy. Frank suddenly becomes a jew. Smith kills more people. Joe loses his mind and then his life (in a rather graphic way that didn't fit the rest of the series at all). Tagomi is just derping around. Chief Inspector Kido... well at least his relationship with the woman from the club is cute.
There are no personal stakes for either of the characters throughout the season. The only characters with personal stakes (Smith and Tagomi) solve them pretty quickly.
There are also no public stakes.
Remember the war that almost happened at the end of s2? Knowing there was a s3 I kept thinking 'something must happen'. The atomic bomb MUST BE dropped onto the Japanese (by accident after the 'bad guy' is apprehended or just SOMEHOW). The atomic bomb MUST be dropped. Well. It wasn't. The war was averted when (thinking about setting up s3) it SHOULDN'T have been. Because what happened in s3? All the stakes were suddenly gone. The characters (as I mentioned) went through so much and lost so much they have nothing left to lose. The public has nothing to lose either at this point.
There simply are no stakes. And that's a terrible thing when you've watched s1 and s2 and know how much opportunity it had!
The best I can figure about the stakes of s3 is that the public stakes are supposed to be the fact that the Nazi Reich is trying to build a wormhole/whatever into other worlds to spread the Nazi Reich into them.
But why? They haven't even conquered their own world yet. They are too afraid to start war with the Japanese but at the same time they're working to conquer whole new worlds? What? It makes just as little sense as the 7-10 kiss/sex scenes in every single episode.
I applaud you if you've stuck with me so far. I would have kept it shorter but I wanted to make a good example of this. (And also the horrible storytelling of s3 makes me really angry after how good the first two seasons were).
This is story-telling 101.
If your first book ends in preventing a war then your second book can't hang on to all kinds of personal sob stories of your characters. You raised the stakes by starting a horrible war... and then let everyone down by going back to 'oh yeah but listen these characters are suffering individually' (and then they're not even suffering anyway but just being or randomly jumping into bed with everyone else).
Of course it's hard to top two great seasons and make the third better. But s3 was just horrible to watch - and so are many other book and TV series these days. The purpose of raising the stakes is to keep reader/audience interest. It doesn't work when they first avert a war and then go back to doing nothing at all for a whole book/season.
I really hope this wall of text will help you figure out why stakes are so important and how to use them well! And if your book two is already great and you just can't figure out what to do for book three? THINK HARDER. THINK BIGGER. If they averted a war in book two it's time to deal with that exact same war in book three OR bow out. There can be no going back to a normal 'comfortable' life after that. Not if you don't want your readers to fall asleep while reading your book (cough Authority by Jeff VanderMeer).
WriteBot has said its piece. Have a good night/day!
How are you doing this fine day? My own writing is... suddenly not going well even though it's been perfect the last few days (???) and I'm going a bit crazy. Ah well. It might sort itself out.
Today let's talk about the importance of raising the stakes.
The most recent example of a series (TV) that failed at this is The Man in the High Castle. I've been dying to talk about this for at least a week since I started to watch Season 3. There will be some (minor) spoilers so if you don't want to know the end of Season 2 stop right here!
What is there to say about The Man in the High Castle.
It started great. The first two seasons were coherent, connected, and everything made sense within the universe where it's set. I liked some of the characters (Tagomi) and hated others (Frank). All of them had their part to play and the first two seasons had UNITY. It had a plot.
Cue Season 3.
The unity evaporated like water in the desert. The characters are no longer doing ANYTHING related to any plot or within their character (established in the first two seasons). They've all gone insane, there is no plot, and the only thing the season has established so far is to put in a lot more fluff. This fluff comes mostly through kissing and unnecessary sex scenes as well as dramatic (emo) scenes where people talk about their emotions that are way too prolonged. Of course I have nothing against either romantic or 'deep' scenes but those are neither. The 'romantic' scenes often happen to characters I don't care about (who were introduced badly in season two and three and with whom the audience has no emotional bond whatsoever) and the emotional talk scenes... well. There's about ten every episode and it's getting old.
There is also (as I have mentioned before) no plot in Season 3 whatsoever. Unless you count the three or four scenes where a dark tunnel is mentioned that needs to be investigated.
All right. Let's get to WHY it doesn't work though. I've talked a lot about WHAT doesn't work. It's time to look at the details of WHY.
The WHY in this case is actually very simple:
The STAKES are not high enough after Season 2. In fact there are almost no stakes at all.
Consider the characters.
At the end of season two they have already lost everything they could lose (Smith his son, Chief Inspector Kido his second in command, Frank is supposedly dead, Juliana everyone she loved, Ed and Childan their shop, livelihood, and family, Joe his honor and pride and so on and so forth, and Tagomi gave up his family for the greater good). These are characters who have absolutely nothing left (and Juliana's sister reappearing in the second season? Well in the third that plot point is made completely useless as the only journey they go through is 'how can we get sister back to her world').
All right. The characters then have nothing left = no personal stakes.
Let's examine the public stakes of s1 and s2 briefly. In s1 the public stakes were beautifully set up and in s2 climaxed upon.
Here is season one's storyline for each main character: What's up with (Juliana and) the films? What will the death of Frank's sister and her children make him do? How far will he go? Will Joe betray them all? Will Tagomi be able to help his spy get the blueprints for the Heisenberg to the science minister and get him out alive? Will Chief Inspector Kido successfully apprehend the resistance member who has the film?
These (mostly personal) stakes are all set up and solved. At the same time Season 2 is set up neatly.
Throughout Season 2 there are even more questions that need answers. There is a new film Juliana needs to see. It is terribly important. Will she manage to get the film to the Man in the High Castle? Who is the Man in the High Castle? Will Frank be found out? Will he be accused of shooting the Japanese crown prince? Will he survive the Yakuza? Will Joe reconnect with his father? Will Tagomi reconnect with his family in the alternate world? Will Chief Inspector Kido apprehend the resistance before it's too late? Will Smith's son survive the season? Will we (the audience) find out more about the films and alternate worlds? Will all of them be able to somehow avert the coming war?
The public stakes here are HUGE. If the Nazi Reich and the Japanese fight over America then millions of people will die. Hundreds of cities will be destroyed. Thousands of communities. And the stakes are averted only at the last minute.
Then we get to Season 3. All the questions above have been answered masterfully. It wasn't perfect (some loose ends and red-shirt setups) but there was a silver lining through all of the two seasons.
Let's see if we can find ANY stakes in this season.
Season 3 starts with Juliana's sister back in her life BUT she has to go back to her own world for reasons unknown - which means the whole plot point of her appearing AT ALL has just been made redundant. It would have been a good ending for Juliana who believes in people and always helps them to get something BACK. But no. Season 3 destroys this.
Frank meanwhile has been hiding out with some jews in the mountains of somewhere. (Denver?). The first and second seasons he has always been adamant about not being a jew (and not just because the Nazis would kill him but because he simply did not wish to live the jewish life). Suddenly, all he wants in life is to be a jew. (And anyway how did he survive the explosion when the girl standing right next to him got smashed up?)
Smith does not react to what happened to his son. He's chill as usual. There is no emotion there where it should have been. Then again... I guess it IS six months later. Smith also has problems with people trying to do him in (or at least get him into prison for treason). A new character is introduced as the 'antagonist' but killed off relatively quickly because ???
Chief Inspector Kido is (as always) doing his own thingamagic. However, all that translates to is his growing relationship with some white woman in a club. I will admit, that's at the moment the only part of the series I enjoy. I like how Kido went from 'I don't talk to working girls' to her being the only woman (person) he talks to honestly. Also she's taller than him which is cute.
Tagomi... is a mystery. He has averted the war in his world. He achieved his mission and why he left his family back in World 2 and returned to Nazi World. So why didn't he go back to them? He was happy there and they were starting to accept him again. BUT he has a new girlfriend (some Japanese painter who says she has a husband but still flirts with Tagomi every chance she gets???). It's all fine. He only loved his wife enough to learn how to traverse worlds.
All these characters do throughout 2/3 of the third season is... nothing whatsoever. Oh of course they're running around doing stuff but none of it has any stakes. Random romantic (or not so romantic since I don't care about these random insert characters who only popped up to have sex with one of the main/side characters) scenes happen. Juliana goes crazy. Frank suddenly becomes a jew. Smith kills more people. Joe loses his mind and then his life (in a rather graphic way that didn't fit the rest of the series at all). Tagomi is just derping around. Chief Inspector Kido... well at least his relationship with the woman from the club is cute.
There are no personal stakes for either of the characters throughout the season. The only characters with personal stakes (Smith and Tagomi) solve them pretty quickly.
There are also no public stakes.
Remember the war that almost happened at the end of s2? Knowing there was a s3 I kept thinking 'something must happen'. The atomic bomb MUST BE dropped onto the Japanese (by accident after the 'bad guy' is apprehended or just SOMEHOW). The atomic bomb MUST be dropped. Well. It wasn't. The war was averted when (thinking about setting up s3) it SHOULDN'T have been. Because what happened in s3? All the stakes were suddenly gone. The characters (as I mentioned) went through so much and lost so much they have nothing left to lose. The public has nothing to lose either at this point.
There simply are no stakes. And that's a terrible thing when you've watched s1 and s2 and know how much opportunity it had!
The best I can figure about the stakes of s3 is that the public stakes are supposed to be the fact that the Nazi Reich is trying to build a wormhole/whatever into other worlds to spread the Nazi Reich into them.
But why? They haven't even conquered their own world yet. They are too afraid to start war with the Japanese but at the same time they're working to conquer whole new worlds? What? It makes just as little sense as the 7-10 kiss/sex scenes in every single episode.
I applaud you if you've stuck with me so far. I would have kept it shorter but I wanted to make a good example of this. (And also the horrible storytelling of s3 makes me really angry after how good the first two seasons were).
This is story-telling 101.
If your first book ends in preventing a war then your second book can't hang on to all kinds of personal sob stories of your characters. You raised the stakes by starting a horrible war... and then let everyone down by going back to 'oh yeah but listen these characters are suffering individually' (and then they're not even suffering anyway but just being or randomly jumping into bed with everyone else).
Of course it's hard to top two great seasons and make the third better. But s3 was just horrible to watch - and so are many other book and TV series these days. The purpose of raising the stakes is to keep reader/audience interest. It doesn't work when they first avert a war and then go back to doing nothing at all for a whole book/season.
I really hope this wall of text will help you figure out why stakes are so important and how to use them well! And if your book two is already great and you just can't figure out what to do for book three? THINK HARDER. THINK BIGGER. If they averted a war in book two it's time to deal with that exact same war in book three OR bow out. There can be no going back to a normal 'comfortable' life after that. Not if you don't want your readers to fall asleep while reading your book (cough Authority by Jeff VanderMeer).
WriteBot has said its piece. Have a good night/day!
Wednesday, November 28, 2018
2019 Book List
Hey everyone!
This year's almost over (one month to go!) and I've just finished the 64th book this year. That in turn got me thinking about next year. What would I like to read? I have a truly enormous reading list in general but have decided to already prepare (by buying books and making them 'available' on my devices to read whenever fancy strikes) a list. That way I won't get hung up on what I should read next/where to get it/and so on.
Here's the list (so far) that I want to go through in 2019:
1. Undersea Fleet
2. The Kraken Wakes
3. Ascension (Water)
4. Boundary
5. The Compound Effect
6. The Success Principles
7. The Hungry Brain
8. Brain Food
9. Fasting and Eating for Health
10. Intermittent Fasting for Women
11. The Life-Changing Magic of Tidying
12. The Complete Guide to Fasting
13. Halfway Human
14. Black Leopard, Red Wolf
15. The Departure
16. Rebel of the Sands
17. Autobiography of Black Hawk
18. The Individual Psychology of Alfred Adler
19. The Abyss Surrounds Us
20. The Deep Woods
21. The Dreaming Stars
22. Smoke in the Sun
23. Of Fire and Stars
24. The World Walker
25. The Assassin's Curse
26. Forgotten Places
27. When the Future Comes too Soon
28. Sky Dancer
29. Sky Song
30. The Winter of the Witch
31. Tides of the Titans
32. Darkdawn
33. Lonesome Dove
34. All the Crooked Saints
35. Autobiography of a Geisha
36. Change your Brain, Change your Life
37. The Evolution of God
38. Lotus War 1
39. The Man in the High Castle
40. The Future of Humanity
41. Godblind Anna Stephens
42. Start with Why
43. Leaders Eat Last
As you can see my reading list is wide and varied. It contains fiction and non-fiction. It contains YA books as well as adult books and most especially in the non-fiction category some books on leadership and healthy food (brain food actually).
I am however still lacking 17 books to reach my goal of 60 books a year. (This year's was 52. I overshot it by some and wanted to make 60 a regular number instead.) That means I'm looking for suggestions! Can you recommend any books you absolutely loved? Is there a book coming out you think absolutely fits on this (messy) list? I'd love to know it! I'm always open to new and good material to read.
Have a recommendation? Post it in the comments! All suggestions welcome!
WriteBot out.
This year's almost over (one month to go!) and I've just finished the 64th book this year. That in turn got me thinking about next year. What would I like to read? I have a truly enormous reading list in general but have decided to already prepare (by buying books and making them 'available' on my devices to read whenever fancy strikes) a list. That way I won't get hung up on what I should read next/where to get it/and so on.
Here's the list (so far) that I want to go through in 2019:
1. Undersea Fleet
2. The Kraken Wakes
3. Ascension (Water)
4. Boundary
5. The Compound Effect
6. The Success Principles
7. The Hungry Brain
8. Brain Food
9. Fasting and Eating for Health
10. Intermittent Fasting for Women
11. The Life-Changing Magic of Tidying
12. The Complete Guide to Fasting
13. Halfway Human
14. Black Leopard, Red Wolf
15. The Departure
16. Rebel of the Sands
17. Autobiography of Black Hawk
18. The Individual Psychology of Alfred Adler
19. The Abyss Surrounds Us
20. The Deep Woods
21. The Dreaming Stars
22. Smoke in the Sun
23. Of Fire and Stars
24. The World Walker
25. The Assassin's Curse
26. Forgotten Places
27. When the Future Comes too Soon
28. Sky Dancer
29. Sky Song
30. The Winter of the Witch
31. Tides of the Titans
32. Darkdawn
33. Lonesome Dove
34. All the Crooked Saints
35. Autobiography of a Geisha
36. Change your Brain, Change your Life
37. The Evolution of God
38. Lotus War 1
39. The Man in the High Castle
40. The Future of Humanity
41. Godblind Anna Stephens
42. Start with Why
43. Leaders Eat Last
As you can see my reading list is wide and varied. It contains fiction and non-fiction. It contains YA books as well as adult books and most especially in the non-fiction category some books on leadership and healthy food (brain food actually).
I am however still lacking 17 books to reach my goal of 60 books a year. (This year's was 52. I overshot it by some and wanted to make 60 a regular number instead.) That means I'm looking for suggestions! Can you recommend any books you absolutely loved? Is there a book coming out you think absolutely fits on this (messy) list? I'd love to know it! I'm always open to new and good material to read.
Have a recommendation? Post it in the comments! All suggestions welcome!
WriteBot out.
Tuesday, November 27, 2018
Short Story Update: Catching Fireflies
Hi again! Today's a busy day!
As promised yesterday, the revisions of Catching Fireflies are out. I have just uploaded the new document onto Amazon KDP and those who've a copy of the previous version are getting an update of about... 900% more than the story was before! The story simply developed out of hand while I was working on it.
So here's to you, reviewer who wanted MORE CONTENT and NEEDED MORE INFORMATION about what happened after the initial story. Here's the continuation of a story I didn't think I'd ever write on again.
Of course there also needs to be a celebration! So in order to celebrate the new and EVEN SHINIER version of Catching Fireflies I've decided to post the first part of it (what it used to be before today) here on my blog. That's right. It's right here if you just scroll down a little.
(PS: before you lose yourself in Mairie and Dyl's world please keep in mind updates on KDP will take a while still so perhaps the actual update will only be available tomorrow. Have fun!)
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Have a good night/day!
As promised yesterday, the revisions of Catching Fireflies are out. I have just uploaded the new document onto Amazon KDP and those who've a copy of the previous version are getting an update of about... 900% more than the story was before! The story simply developed out of hand while I was working on it.
So here's to you, reviewer who wanted MORE CONTENT and NEEDED MORE INFORMATION about what happened after the initial story. Here's the continuation of a story I didn't think I'd ever write on again.
Of course there also needs to be a celebration! So in order to celebrate the new and EVEN SHINIER version of Catching Fireflies I've decided to post the first part of it (what it used to be before today) here on my blog. That's right. It's right here if you just scroll down a little.
(PS: before you lose yourself in Mairie and Dyl's world please keep in mind updates on KDP will take a while still so perhaps the actual update will only be available tomorrow. Have fun!)
Did you enjoy this story? Check it out on:Catching Fireflies
“Tell them you're catching fireflies,” Dyl's mother said. “For the lamps.”Dyl acknowledged her words with a quick jerk of the head before he collected the glass jars she'd laid out for him and left. He swam up to the calm surface near the shore. The alibi could hold. It was summer and the fireflies aplenty this close to dusk. Dyl gathered the tiny insects until the sky darkened and the town lit to mock the stars above. The harvest was good but couldn't quite ease his tension as he waited. His stomach – empty except the few fireflies who'd found their way past his sharp, needle-like canines – quirked queasily.The girl coming down the small hill just off the shore was about the same age as he would have been were he man, her bare footsteps light on the wet sand. Her dress and curls rustled in the evening wind.Dyl decided to play it coy. He hid in the seaweeds, but kept the top of his head above the languid tides.Until he heard her cry out.Then came the next phase of the plan.He ducked under the waves and waited to hear her call him back.“Come back! Come back!” she cried. Her voice was muffled by the waterline as if she were speaking through a great conch. “I won't hurt you!”Nonetheless he made her wait a while before he re-emerged. Long enough to ignite her curiosity with a spark of desperation, so that when she saw him, she would only wonder at his strangely dark-luminous eyes and boyish appearance, not worry about the too-long needle-fangs and tall dorsal fins.When he did surface he did it slowly, as if he were shy.“Who are you?” she asked. The calm curiosity in her voice reassured Dyl somewhat as he struggled to remember how he'd been taught to proceed.The girl's head tilted. “You're not a mermaid.”Dyl's tail twitched. Why wasn't she scared? At least a bit? He did have fangs and eerie-to-humans eyes after all. There was no protocol to deal with unfazed human girls.“What's your name?” he managed.Her forehead creased. “Why should I tell you? You haven't told me anything about you.”Dyl wet his lips.“I – I'm – my name is Dyl. Indyl.”“Strange.”It was his turn to scowl. He crossed his arms – pectoral fins jagged against the pale-blue skin of his elbows and forearms - snarled – and closed his mouth immediately when her eyes narrowed curiously. The girl laughed.“What?” he said.“I like it. Your name. It doesn't matter that it's strange.” A pause. “I'm Mairie.”Dyl's arms unravelled. He couldn't help himself. He might just like her better than the others – all the others combined.“What are you doing?” Mairie asked.He forced the flutter of his gills to stop.“Collecting fireflies from the reeds.” He turned to show her the jars tied to the side of his waist with seaweed rope.“Why?”“To light the lamps in the deep.”“Why?”He paused slyly. “It's dark down there.”“Oh.”Dyl twirled in the water and showed her his tail fins. “I could show you if you like.”Mairie scowled. “Papa'll be angry if I leave.”Dyl wet his lips as if that'd help the sudden dryness in his gills. How would he play this? He hadn't considered the human girl's parents because they didn't matter. They weren't his prey. What could he say to disperse her concerns?“He'll never find you.”Her brows creased, as if this didn't reassure her at all, and she shook her head.Dyl gave an elaborate shrug – as if her rejection didn't sting just a tiny bit worse than the average pincer - and turned to the open water as if to leave.“Wait!”He glanced over his jaggily finned shoulder.“What do I have to do to come with you?” she asked.Dyl's heart thrilled. He would have to play this last phase of the plan gently to keep her placid.“You'd have to grow fins and gills to breathe,” he said.Her eyes widened. “How?”He felt a pinch of guilt. “You can't go back if you do.”“Back where?”“The surface.”“But you're here.”“You can't ever walk the land again,” he said.“Never?”“Never.”She crossed her arms. Dyl's gills heated. He thought she would reject him then, out of fear or trepidation, and also that he should have talked more about the firefly lamps and the alluring serenity of the deep and less about the everlasting dark and the Rubicon she would have to cross.She said, “I don't mind. Daddy's gone and I don't like papa's new... friend. They always fight.”Dyl tried to keep himself from nibbling his nails as his heart hitched.“I could help you if you want,” he managed. “To grow fins and gills and a tail like mine.”“You would?” And then, suspiciously, “Why?”Dyl shrugged. His gills must have glowed, so hot did they feel.What could he have said? That she was special? That he wouldn't hurt her? That it wouldn't hurt? But he wasn't that good a liar, and he wanted her to know the truth.Because she was special.Mairie contemplated Dyl a moment longer, as if his silence communicated more than any of his words could have.And at last she gave a nod.
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Xenos and THE OTHER PROJECT
Hey everyone!
As you know, I've been working on edits for several stories that'll go into the Xenos short story collection. I know a lot of you also liked the cover (yay!). Today, I wanted to just quickly update you on Xenos and... surprise you!
Xenos first.
It's been going great. Xenos will be published on the 7th of December. The short stories included are nearly finished with their last edit. I'll of course update you once it's done, but the most important date to keep in mind is December 7th 2018! That's when Xenos comes out on KDP.
BUT that's not all.
Because it's Christmas soon I've decided to release another short story collection at the same time!
Here's the cover!
This collection is very much different from Xenos. Where Xenos focuses a lot on the unknown and scary in combination with cosmic events, Worlds of Magic is a collection of magical and gentle tales of friendships, love, and adventure.
The stories included are:
Lucy and the Magician (a sweet story featuring the tales of many lives)
Seafarer (How did the princess fall in love with the pirate queen?)
The Hungry Worlds (A girl thief trying to atone for stealing a village's most prized sword... but maybe primarily to impress a knight of the all female watch)
Into The Still Places (the prince of a far-away place trying to save not only his world but that of his enemies as well)
The Path of Lost Souls (a boy's trial by maze to survive into adulthood. This one isn't so gentle as the rest.)
Are you hyped yet? You should be. These stories are perfect to read when you're feeling lonely or sad. They're also perfect as a Christmas gift! They will be released on the same day as Xenos - 7th of December - and you can buy them on Amazon once they're out. I'll of course update with a link once it's on there!
That's all about Xenos and Worlds of Magic.
Another update (that doesn't strictly need to be discussed but will discussed anyway): I've been watching The Man in the High Castle (Amazon Prime series) for the last few weeks. At this point I'm almost done with season three and severely disappointed. The first two seasons were great. It all made sense (mostly). But with season three the writers have just failed in their mission to keep watchers hooked. The tension and excitement of the first and second seasons just isn't there. Why? Because the writers failed to raise the stakes after season two. How? I'll explain more in my post about this very topic tomorrow! It's a great case study in what NOT to do when you're writing a series.
For now, good night/day! WriteBot.
As you know, I've been working on edits for several stories that'll go into the Xenos short story collection. I know a lot of you also liked the cover (yay!). Today, I wanted to just quickly update you on Xenos and... surprise you!
Xenos first.
It's been going great. Xenos will be published on the 7th of December. The short stories included are nearly finished with their last edit. I'll of course update you once it's done, but the most important date to keep in mind is December 7th 2018! That's when Xenos comes out on KDP.
BUT that's not all.
Because it's Christmas soon I've decided to release another short story collection at the same time!
Here's the cover!
This collection is very much different from Xenos. Where Xenos focuses a lot on the unknown and scary in combination with cosmic events, Worlds of Magic is a collection of magical and gentle tales of friendships, love, and adventure.
The stories included are:
Lucy and the Magician (a sweet story featuring the tales of many lives)
Seafarer (How did the princess fall in love with the pirate queen?)
The Hungry Worlds (A girl thief trying to atone for stealing a village's most prized sword... but maybe primarily to impress a knight of the all female watch)
Into The Still Places (the prince of a far-away place trying to save not only his world but that of his enemies as well)
The Path of Lost Souls (a boy's trial by maze to survive into adulthood. This one isn't so gentle as the rest.)
Are you hyped yet? You should be. These stories are perfect to read when you're feeling lonely or sad. They're also perfect as a Christmas gift! They will be released on the same day as Xenos - 7th of December - and you can buy them on Amazon once they're out. I'll of course update with a link once it's on there!
That's all about Xenos and Worlds of Magic.
Another update (that doesn't strictly need to be discussed but will discussed anyway): I've been watching The Man in the High Castle (Amazon Prime series) for the last few weeks. At this point I'm almost done with season three and severely disappointed. The first two seasons were great. It all made sense (mostly). But with season three the writers have just failed in their mission to keep watchers hooked. The tension and excitement of the first and second seasons just isn't there. Why? Because the writers failed to raise the stakes after season two. How? I'll explain more in my post about this very topic tomorrow! It's a great case study in what NOT to do when you're writing a series.
For now, good night/day! WriteBot.
Monday, November 26, 2018
WIP Progress Report
Hey everyone!
It's been a long day already for me. I finished editing Catching Fireflies's bonus draft (I did not choose the adding-another-8k-words-to-the-story life! The adding-words-life chose me!) and it's complete at 9k words. These 9k words were edited over the last three and a half weeks since my post on 10X WIP here.
Today I'd like to report on my progress and show you what I have done since I started setting actual tangible goals to work on every day. If you want, you can read my initial post about these 10X WIPs (by the way from Grant Cardone's The 10X Rule) through the link above.
Let's get started with my WIP list as it was three and a half weeks ago.
I've so far done:
I have also edited Immortal, which was not on the list to begin with, and am writing two more short stories as well. These are a bit more difficult and longer than my 9k average short story word count. In addition to this I'm committed to one blog post a day (at least) and have been actively improving my author profiles on various sites and finding/hiring new artists for book covers.
Let me give you some thoughts on how planning is working out for me.
1.) Having goals actually makes me sit down and work
2.) I often don't feel motivated to write still but I do it anyway. I have a goal to hit.
3.) The more often I sit down to write the more often I will find SOMETHING to write
4.) In the last three and a half weeks I've been more productive than during the last two years before them
I think the last point is the most important. I started to plan as an experiment (I'm usually someone who does not like to plan what they will do and when) and to be able to talk about my experience with it. As soon as I sat down to plan I found out I actually LIKE planning. I just don't like when my plans go awry. (But of course they do). Still. The numbers don't lie and the numbers are quite awesome (see 4.) again!).
Why don't you join me in my experiment? Come and be productive with me! I promise you'll still be able to procrastinate (still working on getting rid of that habit...) BUT you will also get much more done than you ever thought you could!
Try it out? Tell WriteBot about your own experiment! Let the comment section be open!
Have a good day/night! WriteBot
It's been a long day already for me. I finished editing Catching Fireflies's bonus draft (I did not choose the adding-another-8k-words-to-the-story life! The adding-words-life chose me!) and it's complete at 9k words. These 9k words were edited over the last three and a half weeks since my post on 10X WIP here.
Today I'd like to report on my progress and show you what I have done since I started setting actual tangible goals to work on every day. If you want, you can read my initial post about these 10X WIPs (by the way from Grant Cardone's The 10X Rule) through the link above.
Let's get started with my WIP list as it was three and a half weeks ago.
- editing the fairy tale Catching Fireflies.
- editing Of One Mind.
- editing Eye in the Sky.
- editing Hourglass.(And the other books in the series)
- finishing Ris's story.
- writing the NEW STORY.
- publishing short story collections. Into the Deep, Xenos, and (placeholder name) nice magical stories.
- publishing Elegy of the Stars.
- publishing Warlike/The Torn Earth.
I've so far done:
editing the fairy tale Catching Fireflies.(The updated version will be on KDP tomorrow! Yey! Hype!)editing Of One Mind.editing Eye in the Sky.- editing Hourglass.(And the other books in the series)
- finishing Ris's story.
- writing the NEW STORY.
- publishing short story collections. Into the Deep, Xenos, and (placeholder name) nice magical stories.
publishing Elegy of the Stars.publishing Warlike/The Torn Earth.
I have also edited Immortal, which was not on the list to begin with, and am writing two more short stories as well. These are a bit more difficult and longer than my 9k average short story word count. In addition to this I'm committed to one blog post a day (at least) and have been actively improving my author profiles on various sites and finding/hiring new artists for book covers.
Let me give you some thoughts on how planning is working out for me.
1.) Having goals actually makes me sit down and work
2.) I often don't feel motivated to write still but I do it anyway. I have a goal to hit.
3.) The more often I sit down to write the more often I will find SOMETHING to write
4.) In the last three and a half weeks I've been more productive than during the last two years before them
I think the last point is the most important. I started to plan as an experiment (I'm usually someone who does not like to plan what they will do and when) and to be able to talk about my experience with it. As soon as I sat down to plan I found out I actually LIKE planning. I just don't like when my plans go awry. (But of course they do). Still. The numbers don't lie and the numbers are quite awesome (see 4.) again!).
Why don't you join me in my experiment? Come and be productive with me! I promise you'll still be able to procrastinate (still working on getting rid of that habit...) BUT you will also get much more done than you ever thought you could!
Try it out? Tell WriteBot about your own experiment! Let the comment section be open!
Have a good day/night! WriteBot
Sunday, November 25, 2018
Chapter Preview: Warlike!
Hey everyone!
Because you liked the character introduction I did yesterday so much (seriously! I got like three or four times the views of my other posts!) today's blog post will be a chapter preview of Warlike.
Without much further ado...
I hope you enjoyed it! The link to the book can be found here: Amazon Link!
Have a good evening/day!
Because you liked the character introduction I did yesterday so much (seriously! I got like three or four times the views of my other posts!) today's blog post will be a chapter preview of Warlike.
Without much further ado...
CHAPTER ONE
I told myself I didn't need the Elder's permission or even tolerance of my plan to do what had to be done. If we were to survive against the raptors, we needed weapons, and despite Kava's dire warnings, weapons were what the artefacts of old civilizations had left behind in that ancient, terrible haunt, the Deep.And I wouldn't let Venya's war party have died in vain.The setting moon had darkened the plant-life around me by the time I approached the Deep's craggy outskirts. I hadn't told Iva where I was going, either. Iva wouldn't understand, the same way she hadn't understood my rage after I tried to convince Kava that after the loss of Venya's war party we couldn't simply stand by, but had to protect ourselves. I wondered whether they were missing me by now. They probably did. It wasn't like me not to come home after a patrol. Kava probably knew where I was and Iva would suspect the same thing if she noticed I hadn't come home yet. It made me wonder briefly who might realize where I was headed first. Iva, who'd been my companion since I turned into a huntress, or Kava, the Elder, who could predict a rainstorm days ahead.In front of me the brush opened slightly.I was as close as I ever dared to come before, close enough to see the strange metal spikes, some of them scattered on the ground and the mesh of metal wire covering the ground like a carpet. I'd once tried to follow this carpet to the other side, but I'd not come far. The carpet ended, was torn, and there was no more pattern to it.In the past, before the year 2138, it might have stood erect, like the fences we used to keep animals out of the village.But what did they want to keep out? Or in? Had the plague of raptors already been a problem all those centuries ago, when the fence was erected (though I couldn't imagine the thin metal mesh would have held them) or had there been worse threats?Beyond the fence, the land rose slightly. Trees were growing back slowly here, where they hadn't for centuries, and they were strangely tall, imposing, where they stood isolated. The rest of the area was clear, giving a good view onto the gigantic structure in the middle: the Deep.It rose from the ground like a massive piece of grey rock. Veins and stranglethorns grew on and over its walls in patches, and usually, the raptors weren't far off. I slowed down my steps, went into a crouch. I was wearing red, of course, but the raptors weren't entirely stupid. If they saw movement, they'd assume something living, because there was no wind. They didn't care what it was they attacked, as long as it was meat. Humans, great cats, water bears, meat.I ducked past the single standing remains of the giant fence, grown against and within a giant's fan, and slid into the underbrush. The going was difficult here, the brush thick, because no one had been here for a while to clear it. The atmosphere was quiet, no raptor showing its reptilian face. The air smelled slightly rancid, with a lingering, ancient taste of something sharp and metallic, like blood. The closer to the Deep you came, the stronger the smell, but it never sharpened enough to bite your nostrils after all this time. And it had been a while. No one of my tribe remembered what the Deep was for, or when it'd last seen people.Around the Deep, the night turned cold and the red furs on my shoulders ruffled in a chill wind. The sudden change in temperature made my my fingers stiff and I felt for the metal tube on my back for reassurance. I couldn't have said why I brought it, since it didn't work. Maybe there was no reason at all, and I just liked the feel of the metal. But perhaps I was hoping it would protect me should something happen, that it would suddenly spring to life.But then, when it happened, the tube stayed as lifeless as it'd been before.In a short time, I was close enough to the Deep to see the scars on the surface of its walls. The material was unfamiliar to me, a girl of the jungle-forest. It was like stone, but grainy, and, as I later learned, not as hard. It had the colour of stone, too, but no stone ever was as evenly dark grey as the mass of the Deep's wall.I approached it carefully, making no sound on the broken leafs and twigs around it. Here and there, debris glittered on the ground around me, like puddles of water that should have long evaporated. The air smelled again of the sharply metallic smell. It reminded me momentarily of the time our elders sacrificed a lamb to appeal to the rainstorms.I snorted inside.It was little consolation that they hadn't repeated that trick ever since.I was about to turn towards the structure to examine more closely the material the Deep's walls were made of when the earth trembled slightly beneath my feet. Earthquake, my brain warned. Danger. But then, before instinct could send me to shelter, movement in the corner of my eyes caught my attention. In the same breath I realized how quiet it was, the constant noise of the small jungle-forest animals drowned by something... bigger.Raptors.They came out of the treeline, almost half as tall as the trees themselves. Their hides, a green and yellow, covered in thick scales the size of a human head. And those were the smallest of them, the foragers. The bigger ones could reach up to the tree crowns without much difficulty. The raptors' skins were tough as metal, reptilian, but at the same time pliable as leather, and the only thing that could penetrate it was metal, the kind we didn't have, and the reason we couldn't fight them. Thin, short arms, with claws the size of half a man and knife-sharp teeth half again the size of one of my tribesmen threatened if you ever were caught, and getting caught happened too often, even though my tribeswomen didn't stray far from the village and the raptors weren't smart enough to know we were all gathered there.My breath stalled. I was closer now to the raptors than I'd been before in my life, and an absurd thought suddenly emerged in my mind. Had Ion and Tarin been as terrified when they scouted the Deep? When they somehow managed to kill that raptor we found, later, when we already knew they were lost?I pushed the thought away almost as soon as it surfaced. Terror was useless. Terror made you careless, made you do things you wouldn't do in your right mind. I needed to keep my wits. I needed to ignore the fear and get out of here.I made myself as small as possible and slowly slunk back into the shadow of the Deep's wall. There was nowhere to hide except in plain sight. I couldn't fight the raptors, not with the knife on my belt, not with the metal cylinder strapped to my back, but they might not see me if I didn't move. The foragers' red-rimmed, slit-pupiled eyes easily spotted movement, but scenery, especially red, essentially made them blind. The red of my clothing would make me melt with the wall like another rock. The only problem then was their sense of smell. My heart pounded rapidly, quickening my blood, producing more sweat. Blood and sweat. The ultimate cocktail to lure a raptor, and their scent was the second superior sense to their hearing.I had to move if I wanted to survive.But I couldn't move.Foragers were fast, their two hind legs strong and springy. I wouldn't outrun them.I inched a step to the right and immediately froze as my attention was drawn to the other side of the clearing. To the north-west, where the moon was dying, more of the foragers, outlined against the bright, dark-red glow of the rising sun's corona]. Trapped. Air went through my windpipe with effort. But the wind hadn't turned to bring my smell to either of the raptor schools yet. I could run, make it to the boundary of the Deep, if I was quick enough, and then lose myself in the thicket. But I didn't fool myself. I couldn't outrun the raptors if they caught sight or scent of me and the underbrush wasn't an obstacle for the small foragers and their sharp claws. But the wind wouldn't hold. The night wind always turned south during the day. It could be seen in the shape of trees around the village and around the Deep.Then what other option did I have? Shaking with the night's cold as well as fear, which I tried to no avail to suppress, I turned back toward the Deep]. It was obvious the Deep wasn't a natural outcrop just as our huts weren't. There'd been rumours, and even more so when Ion and Tarin disappeared, that the Deep was a dwelling place of old. I didn't care about the rumours and I didn't believe the Deep was anything menacing by itself, especially not the birthplace of raptors. I cared not to be spotted, not to end up as the raptors' dinner.So, instead of trying to outrun certain death, I turned toward the Deep and started to inch my way around its wall by the feel of my clam palm against the concrete.Where there was a man-made structure, there had to be an entrance. And that was my only chance to survive.
I hope you enjoyed it! The link to the book can be found here: Amazon Link!
Have a good evening/day!
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